The wind blows as the grass swings side to side,as the sun slowly sets at dawn the silence has begun, as I was lying in the silky long grass Poppies started growing and they were blood red, as I was wondering what happened here I slowly set my mind at ease.
As I was lying there thinking I heard birds singing and trees talking, there I thought this was an imagination but in the distance I heard shooting and yelling but nothing was there so I stayed calm but then as I was about to close my eyes I heard a little sound in my ear saying “The Fallen Soldiers”.
As I heard that the wind blew in my face like racing bullets and I felt cold and chilly, the poppies were Blood red and that made me thinking why is it blood red?, and as 5 minutes passed I felt very calm and the silence was amazing but I never thought this would be this good and and self calming.
Kia ora Viena, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I really like how you created a sombre mood, connecting the picture of the poppies to fallen soldiers. A suggestion for next time would be to try and write in present tense the whole way through (as if it's happening right now).
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